On Twitter I found a screenwriter to follow - new to twitter, veteran screenwriter:
This tweet was retweeted by @JustinWHedges
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@fieldink 12:35pm via Web
Action or Char to open ur scpt? No 1 answer. Depends on genre. Either character drives the action or action drives the character #writers
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Ooops! A long time ago someone asked me to do a blog entry on OPENINGS and I forgot until I saw that tweet.
Here's the twitter bio of @fieldink that made me follow him:
Screenwriter, Teacher, Lecturer, Author of Screenplay, The Screenwriter's Workbook, on faculty at USC's Prof Writing Program, Hall of Frame Inductee
He is on the sydfield.com website -- that's why he could explain "opening" in such a succinct way. You have to admire that, but I wonder how many of you understand what he's talking about well enough to go, "Aha!" and then just change the way you find how to open your stories?
I've written about crafting the opening of an Action Romance in this blog entry:
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2011/01/constructing-opening-of-action-romance.html
But we need to examine this "find the opening scene" process more carefully because it is mostly done subconsciously. It's just that it usually takes years and lots of failures before the new writer trains the subconscious to formulate the opening correctly.
Take for example my novels MOLT BROTHER and its direct sequel CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS. Here are the links to refresh memory:
https://www.amazon.com/Molt-Brother-Lifewave-Book-1-ebook/dp/B004AYCTBA/
https://www.amazon.com/City-Million-Legends-First-Lifewave-ebook/dp/B007KPLRUU/
Paper, ebook and audiobook versions of both books are available, but Amazon isn't linking them very well for City of a Million Legends.
The idea for those novels came to me (while waking up) as a SCENE, and at the time I thought it was the opening scene.
It's a powerful scene -- but what appeared in the final published book was very different.
What was the scene? The one where Arshel is in molt and Zref is standing outside the closed space ship cabin door where she is in anguished distress understanding what she's going through, what he should do, and what he should not do -- and then doing what he should not do because he must do it.
That's no opening scene, and it's not an ending scene either. To me there were layers of emotional and alien-emotional conflict criss-crossing the scene, and reams of esoteric karmic drama driving Zref's decision, but it was all there in one flash of a visual scene -- the door or air-lock portal, Zref's hand raised to the door, and a telepathic vibrancy shimmering in the air.
Notice the opening of MOLT BROTHER is a scene between Arshel and her parents -- and the parents never appear again.
Or do they?
Aren't her parents "there" inherently in every event that happens because of how the parents handle this scene where she declares herself bonded to a human -- and a male at that! The parents aren't entirely clear on which is worse, his gender or his species!
Scarred by that moment, trapped with no way to go home, no way out, no way back, Arshel plunges forward into life with Dennis Lakely and sticks it out longer than any of us would, until that moment when she's utterly bereft, trapped in that space ship cabin and all alone.
The second chapter opens on Zref and his bonded companion trying to lay plans for their future together, hustling tourists for cash to go to college together offworld.
Because of things that Dennis Lakely's parents do, Zref is left without that bond.
The reason he opens that door into Arshel's life is the same as the reason Arshel got trapped in that plight -- no way back, no way around, no way but forward.
The walls of the trap are largely emotional, but that emotion closes in from all sides because of (unrevealed until the second book) karmic connections, decisions and actions and results of long-ago lifetimes.
But when I "had the idea" all those emotions were tangled up and layered. Though the moment was vivid in my mind, and the drama apparent, it wasn't the story opening.
CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS is the story I wanted to tell, and though it opens with a Kren baby hatching, it's real beginning is in that moment when Zref opens the door to Arshel's life and makes vows he isn't allowed to make.
If you've read the book, you understand how much "worldbuilding" went into creating that moment of choice for Zref.
How do you do that? How do you untangle a vivid, single-scene IDEA into a linear story-line that allows you to explain worldbuilding, whole cultures, interstellar civilization, interstellar archeology, without much exposition?
Many new writers would just start with Zref's hand on the door, then fill in 20 or more pages explaining (in exposition - years ago, this happened, then that tragedy, then he made this choice, and now he's committed to this course of action, but he wants to open this door because). It would be so boring! Yet it's high drama in the extreme.
That little tweet from an expert screenwriter tells you exactly how it's done.
If it's one genre - start with character. Romance, for example, is emotionally plotted but the emotion is driven by character.
If it's another genre - start with action. Science Fiction and most Fantasy is action driven plot, so you have to leap into the ACTION with an opening scene where people do things, and then later you find out who they are and why they did this crazy things.
But what genre is MOLT BROTHER?
On the back cover of the Berkeley mass market paperback of MOLT BROTHER there's a quote from C. J. Cherryh (whose Foreigner universe novels I rave about!)
"Jacqueline Lichtenberg has taken a new and interesting direction with this book, partly technological, partly alien cultures, in a very intriguing interrelation."
I had forgotten that quote was there.
It's quite clear -- this is one of the earliest Mixed Genre novels, more mixed than my later award winner, Dushau.
There's also a quote from Andre Norton on Molt Brother:
"Imaginative and outstanding. It captures the reader and won't let go."
THAT is what openings are supposed to do!
But how do you do that? What do you do with "an idea" that turns it into a "captures and won't let go" novel?
Ever seen a movie run backwards? Ever done a rewind on a recorder - harder to understand with a DVR that skips frames on backwards, but visualize it.
That's what you do.
You take your "idea" separate it into "layers" (his story; her story) and run it backwards in your head until you get to the "right" moment.
How do you identify or recognize the "right" moment that is a "beginning" moment?
Aha, that's easy and I've talked about it here before in posts on structure and theme.
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2009/01/shifting-pov.html
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2009/08/plot-vs-story.html
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2008/09/how-to-learn-to-use-theme-as-art.html
The general formula for beginning a story is to find the moment in time when the two elements, forces, or characters who will "conflict" to generate the plot first come together.
Last week we mentioned Marion Zimmer Bradely's novel CATCH TRAP -- which opens with the first memory of one of the main characters -- the circus tent being burned. But that's not happening in current time. Nevertheless it works, because the novel not only starts with an emotion-laden action denoting the setting (tent-circus), but one of the themes, (an industry changing as a result of the impact of technology - a science fiction theme guaranteed to captivate any SF reader).
That moment then unravels into the life story of the artistic vocation of this character as a circus performer.
Her first novel, SWORD OF ALDONES (later rewritten and retitled, but I love the first version best) starts with a thought, "We were outstripping the night." I think that's the best opening line of any novel I've ever read -- ever!!!
By comparing the opening line of each of Bradley's novels to the end-line, you can learn everything there is to know about structure.
Sometimes an idea comes to you from the ending, or any random place -- sometimes the idea appears as a scene which does not and can not belong in the novel at all!
Every character's life consists of a variety of intertwined conflicts that don't all run to resolution during their lifetime. Any set of characters probably deals with a set of conflicts that are maybe the factorial of the number of characters in the set -- multiply a lot to get the number.
As you know from my posts on Astrology just for writers, every life has cyclical affairs running like the planets -- a very complicated clock. Every character has a conflict denoted by such a planetary cycle.
The highest drama events are denoted by Pluto -- Sexuality rather than love, car wrecks, being wounded in war, a transition Event that establishes a New Normal.
Pluto, however, does not denote "sudden" events (that's Uranus). You can always see a Pluto event coming -- but you never (almost never-ever) do! You can see it in retrospect, but never in prospect.
An example would be drunk driving. Watching a character who chronically drives drunk, you can easily expect they will get into a wreck at some point. The character, though, even if they've wrecked a car or two, can never - ever - see that they are going to be an amputee or paralyzed or on trial for manslaughter and become a three-month wonder to the media.
Heart attacks are another kind of Pluto-event -- any onlooker can see this character's eating and exercising habits are leading to no good, but the character is shocked-surprised-offended by the event of a heart attack -- "Why me?"
So, if your story is about a person whose chronic habits are going to produce a dramatic, life-changing Event -- you have to decide if your story lies before or after the Event.
Is this a story about misbehavior (such as bullying?) that eventually produces a comeuppance (such as losing a job and ending up in jail framed for embezzlement?).
Is this story designed to deliver a whopping sense of justification to the reader?
Or is this a story about rehabilitation, having learned a hard lesson by the Event, now a life is being rebuilt, and maybe teaching others who are making that mistake to pull back from it? Such as a drug addict or alcoholic teaching 12-step?
Once you know what the story is about -- by analyzing what kind of pay-load the story delivers at "the end" (how you want the reader to feel about herself and the characters at the end) -- then you can "frame" the story by nailing the beginning.
Remember the structural beats of a novel -- usually 4-act rather than the powerful 3-act structure of a screenplay.
The usual length novel (75,000 to 100,000 words) is divided by climaxes into 4 parts or "acts."
A) Beginning
B) 1/4 point
C) Middle
D) 3/4 point
END and/or denoument.
The quarter-points have their own specific formulas. "Pacing" is just another term for putting the quarter point Events at the quarter-point page-number.
When checking a book for reviewability, (as an editor checks a manuscript for publishability) the first thing I look at is the Beginning, Middle, and End by page-count.
If the Events delineated at those points are connected in a developmental Arc that makes sense, I'll read the book. If not, not. If I get hooked on the Beginning and when I get to the middle, the Event on that page is not a "Middle" Event -- I might check the End event, page a little to find what goes in the Middle and if it's not anywhere near where it should be, I won't bother finishing.
Most writers think of that as a flaw. It isn't because a book that has its pacing "off" by too much will not deliver to the readers the emotional payload they paid good money for.
This is why finding the right beginning Event is so crucial. Once the Beginning is determined, the Middle and End are absolutely known. You can't fudge it. It is what it is. Readers who read a lot of books (the very people most likely to pay for your book) are used to finding what they pay for right where it should be.
You wouldn't sell them a dress with the seams only basted, would you?
So don't sell them a novel with the Events in the wrong places.
You avoid that by choosing the opening point.
But the thing is, when you start writing a story, you really don't actually know the ending! Or if you do, you probably don't know the Middle or Beginning precisely.
Just because the end-product has to be paced "just-so" does not mean the process of producing the first draft will be that clean or orderly.
Nevertheless, outlining --- writing down the beginning, quarter, middle, 3/4, end Events -- is necessary. You have to take a guess, and try for it.
Sometimes characters insist on finding their own karmic solutions - however temporary - and you just have to go along for the ride.
In that case, you change the outline to match and test it to make sure the Events conform to reader's expectations (with surprises, of course). If you don't keep that outline updated, you very likely will have to rewrite and you may need to junk everything you've written and start over.
To avoid putting more hours in than you can get money out, you keep the outline updated, and make sure the Events fall at the right story-points.
Events are on the plot line, emotional peaks and valleys delineate the story going on inside the character, the internal conflict.
You want to get the story and the plot to END in the same Event, as discussed last week.
Where the peaks and valleys occur (by page count) and where the plot Events happen (by page count) depends, as @fieldink said, depends on genre.
If you're heading for a happy ending (an up ending) then the Middle is a DISASTER (a valley, a Pluto-driven Event) such as a maiming car wreck, so the End becomes asking the physical therapist to marry and getting a yes.
That car-wreck scenario tells you that your opening scene is in a bar or at a party where the character who will wreck the car first gets hooked on booze or drugs or whatever behavior will impair judgement. Most likely the Opening would involve an association with an inappropriate character -- maybe someone who then gets killed doing whatever they introduced the main character to.
It doesn't have to be booze or drugs -- it might be the first encounter with car racing, and just plain enjoying speed and winning until the adrenalin of it becomes the drug.
If it's a Romance, of course you start with character, displaying in show-don't-tell the character trait that makes that character the perfect mate for the Physical Therapist who enters later.
Or your character might be headed for a car-wreck that ends him up in court where he meets the Lawyer (prosecutor?) he falls in love with -- and eventually proposes to.
You find the opening of your story by plucking apart the threads of the character's life until you can see one whole cycle of Ups and Downs leading to the ending that delivers the punch the genre readers are looking for.
In my case, it's always the Relationships (not always sexual!). I always look for a character whose life is malfunctioning in some regard (sometimes several regards). My personal life-philosophy shows me how the real world functions on Relationships, and how human psychological health (and thus sane life-choices) depends on functional Relationships.
My mission as a writer is to bring that character's life up to a functional level that feels, at least to the character, as Happy.
One very common mistake beginning writers make is to start their story too late -- when the character is already Happy, or when the character already knows that they are miserable.
The Happily Ever After ending works best when the story starts with the character unaware of the real problem deep inside. The story opens with the character making a decision and/or taking an action (accepting a date; accepting a particular college entry letter; quitting a job; getting fired and getting drunk over it), so that everything else that happens during the novel is a direct consequence of that opening action.
I call that plot technique "the because-line" -- because the main character did this, that happens, to which the main character responds by doing that, which causes this to happen, to which the main character responds etc, right to The End.
That's why, given impeccable story-logic, any beginning contains within it a very specific ending.
After you've chosen the beginning, you don't get to choose just any old ending that you think would be neat. The ending is determined by the beginning.
Or the beginning is determined by the ending you've chosen.
Beginning and Ending make the Middle obvious and irrevocable.
There are many genres, and all kinds of Literary forms that don't use this structure. If you don't like it, don't try to write it.
Here's what to do.
Take a pile of your 10 most beloved novels, the ones you've read so often you can chant the lines in the shower. Spread out ten sheets of paper, take a pen and at the top of each sheet write the TITLE and opening Event (in your own words; describe that Event that kicks off the story and plot).
Look at the page number of the end of the last chapter or epilog, divide by two, and look at that page plus or minus 5 pages, and write down one sentence describing what happens at that point in the novel.
Look at the end Event - not the epilog, but the climax Event, and write that down.
Study the set of sheets -- you may need to rephrase a few times to bring the elements buried in symbolism up to consciousness.
If you can see a consistent beginning/middle/end pattern, that's the sort of book you should set out to write because it's what you most love to read.
It could be that your favorite literature doesn't have this structure. Some very fine classics don't, but they are much harder to learn and to duplicate.
There is a type called "stream of consciousness" - and many new writers think that means they can just write down what they are thinking and it'll be a story. It doesn't work that way. There is a very real, very precise skeletal structure behind these apparently formless writings.
The more formless a piece seems to be, the more heavily it relies on that internal structure for its effectiveness -- like poetry! And its correspondingly hard to duplicate.
One way to learn "stream of consciousness" structure is to practice and internalize the Beginning/Middle/End structure.
The "formless" fictional genres are usually composed of several different structures intertwined, and the only way I know of to learn to do that is to master each of the structures separately -- learn to chew gum and walk by first walking, then chewing gum, then combining.
So again, you always find the Beginning by looking at the Ending -- and the Ending, as @fieldink said depends on the genre.
The best place to learn modern genre structure is in the screenwriting books by Blake Snyder, SAVE THE CAT! series. These are now out in e-book, too, which is handy.
Here is Blake Snyder's Amazon page with all the formats of all the books, including 2016 releases
https://www.amazon.com/Blake-Snyder/e/B00LWI2JXA/
Here's the Book Description from STRIKES BACK:
Blake Snyder, author of Save the Cat!® and Save the Cat!® Goes to the Movies, is back with the book countless readers and students have clamored for. Inspired by questions from his workshops, lectures, and emails, Blake listened and provides new tips, tactics, and techniques to solve your writing problems and create stories that resonate:
The 7 warning signs you might have a great idea or not
2 sure-fire templates for can t-miss loglines
The difference between structure and formula
The Transformation Machine that allows you to track your hero s growth step-by-step
The 5 questions to keep your story s spine straight
The 5-Point Finale to finish any story
The Save the Cat!® Greenlight Checklist that gets to the heart of every development issue
The right way to hear notes, deal with problematic producers, and dive into the rewrite with the right attitude
Why and when an agent will appear
How to discover the potential for greatness in any story
How to avoid panic, doubt, and self-recrimination... and what it takes to succeed and dare to achieve your dreams
Get ready to face trouble like a pro... and strike back!
All of this is just another way of explaining what everyone who is selling fiction knows. You just have to find the one explanation that hits you right.
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://jacquelinelichtenberg.com
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Tuesday, June 19, 2012
Finding the Story Opening, Part 1, Action vs. Character
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Tuesday, September 06, 2011
Audible.com-The AudioBook Adventure
See below for news on Sime~Gen in audiobook edition.
A couple months ago, Wildside Press put my novel Molt Brother
Molt Brother (Lifewave)
and the Sime~Gen novels into Audible.com's program for audiobooks which are distributed on audible.com, on iTunes and on amazon, and I don't know where else.
A couple weeks later, a reader was assigned, and a couple weeks after that Wildside sent me an MP3 of the first few pages of the novel.
The accompanying note just said the editor had reservations about the accent the reader used during the opening.
I recently upgraded my ebook reader to an iPod Touch 4, and was easily able to listen to the MP3 on it that evening.
When I listened to it, I knew what the problem was.
But at the same time, I was suddenly extremely pleased with myself, I'd venture to say insufferably pleased. Molt Brother is one terrific book. It got a new review on amazon from Carol Buchanan, a writer I met on twitter who is not an SF reader at all, and she said,
------Carol Buchanan----------
I don't read science fiction. Or fantasy. And I hate snakes. I don't believe in reincarnation, or karma. Yet I think _Molt Brother_ is a work of high imaginative quality. Translation: It's a great read.
....While wholeheartedly recommending _Molt Brother_ to anyone who reads English, and I'll be happy to read anything else by Ms. Lichtenberg, I have to admit I still hate snakes.
---------END QUOTE-------
I so wanted the audiobook version to live up to that review!
I introduced you to Carol Buchanan here:
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2011/04/gold-under-ice-by-carol-buchanan.html
And you heard from her here in a later post with writing craft advice:
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2011/05/carol-buchanan-on-writing-tricks-and.html
She's a great writer, and you really should read GOLD UNDER ICE.
So back to my problem with the audio opening of MOLT BROTHER.
The opening works very well on paper, but read aloud with an "alien" (i.e. non-human) accent that kinda sounds like the sort-of reptilian amphibian species -- there's a brick wall between the listener and the story. There's no reason for a listener browsing book samples to waste time trying to understand that opening.
I offered 2 solutions and asked if the editor had a third.
I said we could ask the reader to re-do the opening scene, which is just 3 non-humans having an argument. Later in the recording, the accent used for the non-humans becomes better, clearer and more practiced, so a re-recording will probably be more intelligible for the opening.
Or I could write another opening to put a frame around the scene before the aliens start having at each other. This would give listeners a chance to hear the great dramatic reading Voice and realize the audiobook is worth its price before hitting the accent.
I had particularly suggested the aliens speak differently from the humans because their mouths are shaped differently -- and because a listener can't see a whole page of text in front of them and know who's talking to whom and what species they are at a glance. You hear one word at a time, so to know who's talking, you need a suggestion of verbal style. After a few pages, she got it just right, so I think this will work very well.
The editor at Wildside emailed right back and said BOTH solutions.
When I suggested that I'd write something, I had no idea what to write. It had been many years since I'd read the novel or worked with that material. And having just heard the opening read so nicely (this reader is really good!), I didn't want to touch a word of it. I feel that MOLT BROTHER and its direct sequel CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS showcase my "Voice."
We discussed "Voice" a little in the last two weeks.
So how could I frame that opening in that same "Voice" -- I didn't know, so I just started typing.
In my mind, I was thinking of the opening sequence to the old film.
And I just typed. In a very few words (for me) I achieved my objective, so I attached it to an email and wrote the editor:
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Attached is what might be the opening "voice over" for a panoramic
opening of a film -- as the titles roll, we start with STARS, focusing
on a blue planet, close on an island with a big excavated
archeological site, swoop to a nearby house, cut to the interior pond
room and Arshel's confrontation with her parents. (I'm thinking of
the opening of the film ISLAND IN THE SUN - 1957)
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http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0050549/
So here's what I wrote to go before the opening dialogue:
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Way off the beaten track of the Galaxy, a space ship full of humans crashed on a verdant water world occupied by the Kren. The humans crafted an alliance with the Kren natives which functioned well until the galactic civilization rediscovered them.
Generations later, the Kren and human natives have begun to integrate on a deeply personal level – in some parts of their world.
Arshel Holtethor, a young Kren female, does not live in such an integrated place. She has grown up on an island where human archeologists are excavating a city that is hundreds of millions of years old. Enamored by that project and by a human boy of her generation also working on the excavation, Arshel dares too much, then must confess her situation to her parents.
It is not going well….
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He wrote back with a couple tweaks I've included above I think, and I said fine, and he wrote back that he'd sent it to the reader.
At this writing, I haven't heard the re-recording of MOLT BROTHER with my new opening.
If you get a chance to hear it, let me know what you think.
Meanwhile, I ran into an old friend on Twitter, @MichaelSpence , and we got to talking about Sime~Gen, which he thought he should re-read now it's out in ebook edition.
So I mentioned that Wildside was looking for a reader, and since he's spent the last few years doing voice acting, he went and applied to Wildside for the job of reading House of Zeor.
A few weeks later, I got the audition recording of the opening of House of Zeor that Michael Spence had made, and before I could get together with Jean Lorrah to discuss that, Wildside sent a different audition for House of Zeor -- so we suddenly had a choice.
Jean Lorrah and I agreed, and later two more of our simegen.com staffers also agreed, Michael Spence was the one for the job.
The other reader had used software that allows for background sound effects and for filters to change the reader's voice when "doing" other characters. All very nifty, and actually very well done by this reader, but none of us liked the overall effect. That is so strange, but totally unanimous, a conclusion we all arrived at independently.
Just last week I was told that Spence had turned in the first chapter done with better technicals on the audio, but I haven't gotten a copy yet.
Meanwhile, upon my return from Coppercon (held over Labor Day weekend this year) where I was on several panels with Gini Koch (whose novels I've discussed here ...
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2010/04/turning-action-into-romance.html
) I found the final-final proof of the 12th Sime~Gen volume in my inbox. So the new novel, The Farris Channel, will indeed be out in e-book and paper editions soon.
Meanwhile, if you download from audible.com, iTunes, or Amazon, the audiobook editions of either of these novels, do please let us know your reaction - drop a note on this blog if you like. There will be more opportunities to make choices like this.
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://jacquelinelichtenberg.com
A couple months ago, Wildside Press put my novel Molt Brother
Molt Brother (Lifewave)
and the Sime~Gen novels into Audible.com's program for audiobooks which are distributed on audible.com, on iTunes and on amazon, and I don't know where else.
A couple weeks later, a reader was assigned, and a couple weeks after that Wildside sent me an MP3 of the first few pages of the novel.
The accompanying note just said the editor had reservations about the accent the reader used during the opening.
I recently upgraded my ebook reader to an iPod Touch 4, and was easily able to listen to the MP3 on it that evening.
When I listened to it, I knew what the problem was.
But at the same time, I was suddenly extremely pleased with myself, I'd venture to say insufferably pleased. Molt Brother is one terrific book. It got a new review on amazon from Carol Buchanan, a writer I met on twitter who is not an SF reader at all, and she said,
------Carol Buchanan----------
I don't read science fiction. Or fantasy. And I hate snakes. I don't believe in reincarnation, or karma. Yet I think _Molt Brother_ is a work of high imaginative quality. Translation: It's a great read.
....While wholeheartedly recommending _Molt Brother_ to anyone who reads English, and I'll be happy to read anything else by Ms. Lichtenberg, I have to admit I still hate snakes.
---------END QUOTE-------
I so wanted the audiobook version to live up to that review!
I introduced you to Carol Buchanan here:
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2011/04/gold-under-ice-by-carol-buchanan.html
And you heard from her here in a later post with writing craft advice:
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2011/05/carol-buchanan-on-writing-tricks-and.html
She's a great writer, and you really should read GOLD UNDER ICE.
So back to my problem with the audio opening of MOLT BROTHER.
The opening works very well on paper, but read aloud with an "alien" (i.e. non-human) accent that kinda sounds like the sort-of reptilian amphibian species -- there's a brick wall between the listener and the story. There's no reason for a listener browsing book samples to waste time trying to understand that opening.
I offered 2 solutions and asked if the editor had a third.
I said we could ask the reader to re-do the opening scene, which is just 3 non-humans having an argument. Later in the recording, the accent used for the non-humans becomes better, clearer and more practiced, so a re-recording will probably be more intelligible for the opening.
Or I could write another opening to put a frame around the scene before the aliens start having at each other. This would give listeners a chance to hear the great dramatic reading Voice and realize the audiobook is worth its price before hitting the accent.
I had particularly suggested the aliens speak differently from the humans because their mouths are shaped differently -- and because a listener can't see a whole page of text in front of them and know who's talking to whom and what species they are at a glance. You hear one word at a time, so to know who's talking, you need a suggestion of verbal style. After a few pages, she got it just right, so I think this will work very well.
The editor at Wildside emailed right back and said BOTH solutions.
When I suggested that I'd write something, I had no idea what to write. It had been many years since I'd read the novel or worked with that material. And having just heard the opening read so nicely (this reader is really good!), I didn't want to touch a word of it. I feel that MOLT BROTHER and its direct sequel CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS showcase my "Voice."
We discussed "Voice" a little in the last two weeks.
So how could I frame that opening in that same "Voice" -- I didn't know, so I just started typing.
In my mind, I was thinking of the opening sequence to the old film.
And I just typed. In a very few words (for me) I achieved my objective, so I attached it to an email and wrote the editor:
----------
Attached is what might be the opening "voice over" for a panoramic
opening of a film -- as the titles roll, we start with STARS, focusing
on a blue planet, close on an island with a big excavated
archeological site, swoop to a nearby house, cut to the interior pond
room and Arshel's confrontation with her parents. (I'm thinking of
the opening of the film ISLAND IN THE SUN - 1957)
----------
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0050549/
So here's what I wrote to go before the opening dialogue:
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Way off the beaten track of the Galaxy, a space ship full of humans crashed on a verdant water world occupied by the Kren. The humans crafted an alliance with the Kren natives which functioned well until the galactic civilization rediscovered them.
Generations later, the Kren and human natives have begun to integrate on a deeply personal level – in some parts of their world.
Arshel Holtethor, a young Kren female, does not live in such an integrated place. She has grown up on an island where human archeologists are excavating a city that is hundreds of millions of years old. Enamored by that project and by a human boy of her generation also working on the excavation, Arshel dares too much, then must confess her situation to her parents.
It is not going well….
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He wrote back with a couple tweaks I've included above I think, and I said fine, and he wrote back that he'd sent it to the reader.
At this writing, I haven't heard the re-recording of MOLT BROTHER with my new opening.
If you get a chance to hear it, let me know what you think.
Meanwhile, I ran into an old friend on Twitter, @MichaelSpence , and we got to talking about Sime~Gen, which he thought he should re-read now it's out in ebook edition.
So I mentioned that Wildside was looking for a reader, and since he's spent the last few years doing voice acting, he went and applied to Wildside for the job of reading House of Zeor.
A few weeks later, I got the audition recording of the opening of House of Zeor that Michael Spence had made, and before I could get together with Jean Lorrah to discuss that, Wildside sent a different audition for House of Zeor -- so we suddenly had a choice.
Jean Lorrah and I agreed, and later two more of our simegen.com staffers also agreed, Michael Spence was the one for the job.
The other reader had used software that allows for background sound effects and for filters to change the reader's voice when "doing" other characters. All very nifty, and actually very well done by this reader, but none of us liked the overall effect. That is so strange, but totally unanimous, a conclusion we all arrived at independently.
Just last week I was told that Spence had turned in the first chapter done with better technicals on the audio, but I haven't gotten a copy yet.
Meanwhile, upon my return from Coppercon (held over Labor Day weekend this year) where I was on several panels with Gini Koch (whose novels I've discussed here ...
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2010/04/turning-action-into-romance.html
) I found the final-final proof of the 12th Sime~Gen volume in my inbox. So the new novel, The Farris Channel, will indeed be out in e-book and paper editions soon.
Meanwhile, if you download from audible.com, iTunes, or Amazon, the audiobook editions of either of these novels, do please let us know your reaction - drop a note on this blog if you like. There will be more opportunities to make choices like this.
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
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Tuesday, January 06, 2009
The Cycles and the Seasons
Margaret Carter raised an interesting point in her New Year's post.
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2009/01/happy-new-year.html
All of Earth's cultures have noticed we have a "year" -- a solar year, or cycle, and picked a point of the circle for a "beginning" of the year -- and made that a celebration of some sort. Fiction worldbuilders writing for an Earth audience have to take this kind of celebration into account when creating alien cultures - and romances across that cultural gap.
Also this year the standards authorities have brought to our attention that the Earth's rotation is slowing, and this year the master timekeeping standard atomic clock was adjusted another second.
We've only been able to measure accurately for a little while, so presumably the slowing has been going on since Earth began rotating.
Still, the Day is part of the Year cycle. The slowing, the lengthening of the Day and year, indicates a kind of non-permanence about our situation on Earth and around this star. Time is elastic. What changes can begin -- and end. The slowing of the Earth's rotation puts a whole 'nother spin on things.
In the Torah, the Creator of the Universe assigns the proclamation of the New Moon, and the New Year to the human venue. We are responsible for choosing the marking and celebrating of TIME itself -- and as Margaret pointed out, all our cultures create and innovate on how to do this. But NONE of these cultures have chosen "wrong" -- they're all "right" -- all at least OK. Because it's the human prerogative to divide and mark the cycles of Time.
From the human perspective, we all know "time" is "relative." The 20 minute wait in the dentist's office is much longer than the 20 minutes spent watching your favorite movie, or bedding your lover.
If Time were to be absolutely regular and objective, the Creator could have just assigned the cycles and markers to suit Himself. But now, only NOW, we discover that Earth's spin is not precisely repeating. No two years are alike. And it's up to us to call the end and beginning of cycles.
More than that, we now understand how our Sun fits into a spinning Galaxy that's moving through space.
In truth, no two successive years (days or months or any other cycle) are THE SAME. There actually is no "repetition" -- yet we are given the responsibility to mark the anniversaries of a death of a close relative, and other Events that are featured in our personal and collective History. All our cultures and religions have a year's calendar of Holidays commemorating such Events.
Yet the Earth is never -- ever -- in the same place twice. Even in the billions of years it takes a Galaxy to rotate completely, the Galaxy has moved through space and the suns do not come back to the same "place" in space-time.
I used the galaxy's rotation and move through space in setting up the backstory of two novels (now available on fictionwise.com as e-books as well as used on Amazon) - Molt Brother and City of a Million Legends.
Each moment of life is unique. Imagine that.
Margaret brought up one of my favorite novels by Robert A. Heinlein, Time For The Stars, where twins are used to communicate telepathically from Earth to FTL ships.
That reminded me suddenly of a wonderful little book -- HOW TO BUILD A TIME MACHINE by Paul Davies, from Penguin Books paperback 2001 -- reprinted through 2003.
I don't know if this book is still available. It might be woefully out of date with respect to the newest discoveries in astrophysics. But that wouldn't matter to worldbuilders writing fiction.
HOW TO BUILD A TIME MACHINE is popular physics which explains clearly in layman's terms how it is that there can never be any such thing as simultaneity at interstellar distances.
Gravity distorts space-time in such a way that the galactic civilizations we write about really can't exist or function as we describe them -- as analogues of Earth at the time of sailing ships.
My mind is still absolutely dizzy about this concept. Even Robert E. Forward (an astrophysicist) in order to write a good novel had to kind of cheat his way around this concept.
And then a couple years ago I took a course which I've mentioned many times in blogs and my review column ( http://www.simegen.com/reviews/rereadablebooks/2007/ ) and which led to a series of 6 review columns which I called the Soul Time Hypothesis. Those 6 review columns presenting this concept of the relationship between the Soul and Time became the basis of a course I gave in the Spring of 2008.
The mind-boggler is that the soul enters manifest reality through the dimension of Time.
Physicists obsess on measuring Time because it's a factor in almost all the key equations that describe the physical universe. So possibly they'll keep on studying and finally discover that the non-simultaneity concept has to be changed to something more amenable to SF writing. After all, physics said FTL travel is impossible, but we write about it. And physics said matter-transmission is impossible, but it's been done in the Lab (albeit on sub-microscopic particles). So maybe there's hope for writers.
Maybe, by writing such imaginings, getting others to imagine the universe CAN have simultaneous effects on events across galaxies. Maybe we can actually change the way the universe works? If Time is so plastic -- maybe other things are likewise responsive to human imagination? That was the theory behind Marion Zimmer Bradley's MISTS OF AVALON - a wonderful novel of Arthurian Legend's women.
Or alternatively, the power of the human imagination to change the functioning of the physical universe could become the reason that galactic aliens want to destroy Earth and all humans? What a threat - our novels alter THEIR reality! What a Helen of Troy lovestory!
Actually, I approached that idea sidewise in my novel DREAMSPY. But I fudged the physics with a little magic. Anyone know another novel that plays with that concept?
I don't really know how to "worldbuild" myself a universe strictly based on the non-simultaneity concept that includes the Soul-Time Hypothesis and that would work for a novel's background. Yet more than likely a blending of those two ideas would depict our objective reality (if there is such a thing) much better than any novelist has yet managed.
Well, then maybe the key for writers is to create some Aliens who do understand the universe in that blended way - non-Simultaneity plus Soul-Time, and just proceed from there?
Oh, wait -- actually, I think Edward E. ("Doc") Smith did that with the Lensman Series and his Arisians vs. Boskone war that stretched over millenia. I read all those books when I was in grammar school and High School, and they made a deep impression on me. They're still available in a recent reprint.
I haven't seen anything even remotely similar lately. If you have, please drop a note about them on the comments here. But don't forget that the Lensman Series had the first really HOT romance in the space-travel SF field. I've always wished I had auburn hair.
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://www.simegen.com/jl/
http://www.slantedconcept.com
http://aliendjinnromances.blogspot.com/2009/01/happy-new-year.html
All of Earth's cultures have noticed we have a "year" -- a solar year, or cycle, and picked a point of the circle for a "beginning" of the year -- and made that a celebration of some sort. Fiction worldbuilders writing for an Earth audience have to take this kind of celebration into account when creating alien cultures - and romances across that cultural gap.
Also this year the standards authorities have brought to our attention that the Earth's rotation is slowing, and this year the master timekeeping standard atomic clock was adjusted another second.
We've only been able to measure accurately for a little while, so presumably the slowing has been going on since Earth began rotating.
Still, the Day is part of the Year cycle. The slowing, the lengthening of the Day and year, indicates a kind of non-permanence about our situation on Earth and around this star. Time is elastic. What changes can begin -- and end. The slowing of the Earth's rotation puts a whole 'nother spin on things.
In the Torah, the Creator of the Universe assigns the proclamation of the New Moon, and the New Year to the human venue. We are responsible for choosing the marking and celebrating of TIME itself -- and as Margaret pointed out, all our cultures create and innovate on how to do this. But NONE of these cultures have chosen "wrong" -- they're all "right" -- all at least OK. Because it's the human prerogative to divide and mark the cycles of Time.
From the human perspective, we all know "time" is "relative." The 20 minute wait in the dentist's office is much longer than the 20 minutes spent watching your favorite movie, or bedding your lover.
If Time were to be absolutely regular and objective, the Creator could have just assigned the cycles and markers to suit Himself. But now, only NOW, we discover that Earth's spin is not precisely repeating. No two years are alike. And it's up to us to call the end and beginning of cycles.
More than that, we now understand how our Sun fits into a spinning Galaxy that's moving through space.
In truth, no two successive years (days or months or any other cycle) are THE SAME. There actually is no "repetition" -- yet we are given the responsibility to mark the anniversaries of a death of a close relative, and other Events that are featured in our personal and collective History. All our cultures and religions have a year's calendar of Holidays commemorating such Events.
Yet the Earth is never -- ever -- in the same place twice. Even in the billions of years it takes a Galaxy to rotate completely, the Galaxy has moved through space and the suns do not come back to the same "place" in space-time.
I used the galaxy's rotation and move through space in setting up the backstory of two novels (now available on fictionwise.com as e-books as well as used on Amazon) - Molt Brother and City of a Million Legends.
Each moment of life is unique. Imagine that.
Margaret brought up one of my favorite novels by Robert A. Heinlein, Time For The Stars, where twins are used to communicate telepathically from Earth to FTL ships.
That reminded me suddenly of a wonderful little book -- HOW TO BUILD A TIME MACHINE by Paul Davies, from Penguin Books paperback 2001 -- reprinted through 2003.
I don't know if this book is still available. It might be woefully out of date with respect to the newest discoveries in astrophysics. But that wouldn't matter to worldbuilders writing fiction.
HOW TO BUILD A TIME MACHINE is popular physics which explains clearly in layman's terms how it is that there can never be any such thing as simultaneity at interstellar distances.
Gravity distorts space-time in such a way that the galactic civilizations we write about really can't exist or function as we describe them -- as analogues of Earth at the time of sailing ships.
My mind is still absolutely dizzy about this concept. Even Robert E. Forward (an astrophysicist) in order to write a good novel had to kind of cheat his way around this concept.
And then a couple years ago I took a course which I've mentioned many times in blogs and my review column ( http://www.simegen.com/reviews/rereadablebooks/2007/ ) and which led to a series of 6 review columns which I called the Soul Time Hypothesis. Those 6 review columns presenting this concept of the relationship between the Soul and Time became the basis of a course I gave in the Spring of 2008.
The mind-boggler is that the soul enters manifest reality through the dimension of Time.
Physicists obsess on measuring Time because it's a factor in almost all the key equations that describe the physical universe. So possibly they'll keep on studying and finally discover that the non-simultaneity concept has to be changed to something more amenable to SF writing. After all, physics said FTL travel is impossible, but we write about it. And physics said matter-transmission is impossible, but it's been done in the Lab (albeit on sub-microscopic particles). So maybe there's hope for writers.
Maybe, by writing such imaginings, getting others to imagine the universe CAN have simultaneous effects on events across galaxies. Maybe we can actually change the way the universe works? If Time is so plastic -- maybe other things are likewise responsive to human imagination? That was the theory behind Marion Zimmer Bradley's MISTS OF AVALON - a wonderful novel of Arthurian Legend's women.
Or alternatively, the power of the human imagination to change the functioning of the physical universe could become the reason that galactic aliens want to destroy Earth and all humans? What a threat - our novels alter THEIR reality! What a Helen of Troy lovestory!
Actually, I approached that idea sidewise in my novel DREAMSPY. But I fudged the physics with a little magic. Anyone know another novel that plays with that concept?
I don't really know how to "worldbuild" myself a universe strictly based on the non-simultaneity concept that includes the Soul-Time Hypothesis and that would work for a novel's background. Yet more than likely a blending of those two ideas would depict our objective reality (if there is such a thing) much better than any novelist has yet managed.
Well, then maybe the key for writers is to create some Aliens who do understand the universe in that blended way - non-Simultaneity plus Soul-Time, and just proceed from there?
Oh, wait -- actually, I think Edward E. ("Doc") Smith did that with the Lensman Series and his Arisians vs. Boskone war that stretched over millenia. I read all those books when I was in grammar school and High School, and they made a deep impression on me. They're still available in a recent reprint.
I haven't seen anything even remotely similar lately. If you have, please drop a note about them on the comments here. But don't forget that the Lensman Series had the first really HOT romance in the space-travel SF field. I've always wished I had auburn hair.
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://www.simegen.com/jl/
http://www.slantedconcept.com
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Tuesday, January 29, 2008
Doomsday Romance
Margaret Carter wrote below:
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This week the History Channel aired a two-hour special called LIFE AFTER PEOPLE, which explored how the world would change if the human race vanished.
(snipped)
It's not surprising that wood-frame buildings would succumb quickly to rot, termites, and lightning-set fires. But I was shocked to learn how much less “permanent” steel and concrete are than I'd thought. Moreover, modern concrete is less durable than the type used by the ancient Romans, quite a humbling thought. By a thousand years after our extinction, most of our cities would have become unrecognizable as such.
(snipped)
I'd expected books to hang around for alien archaeologists to read, though. Not so, unless they're fortunate enough to be stored in a desert climate and protected from sunlight. Ironically, the stone and clay tablets of our remote ancestors will last longer than any of our advanced information technology.
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And Rowena Cherry added:
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I also saw the program before it, which was about doomsday predictions from different civilizations all over the globe. Apparently, everyone agrees that the world will end in 2012.
Yesterday, I saw a news item about the ice caps now being thought to melt entirely in the summers in five years' time...which will take us to either the summer of 2011 or of 2012.
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I (Jacqueline Lichtenberg) missed the History Channel LIFE AFTER PEOPLE and prior show. Normally, that kind of show doesn't attract me because the underlying editing thrust is to prod the viewer into believing "the worst" or "the horror of it all" -- or other alarmist agendas disconnected from reality by carefully leaving out salient facts (which I might happen to know -- which implies things I don't know being edited out presenting a false picture).
But both Margaret and Rowena are exactly correct to be monitoring what these shows are purveying. This kind of media slant is indeed where we get our unending flood of "crazy ideas."
And it's relevant because of all the viewers who believe the nonsense. Shows and books like this gave me much of the material used in the Sime~Gen novels -- the portrait of a nearly forgotten Ancient Civilization from before the Sime~Gen mutation pretty much fits the History Channel sketch Margaret has presented here.
However, I have more faith in the human spirit, in love, in loyalty, dreams, and the immortality through children.
If all humans were kidnapped by some galactic slave traders (who neglected to destroy Earth's ecology by stealing water and minerals, too), yes, Nature would reclaim our mighty works rapidly indeed. Escapees from interstellar slavery who returned (provided they could find the planet) wouldn't recognize it from ancestral tales.
Imagine being kidnapped along with most all humans from Earth just to provide genetic material for some huge hybridizing cloning operation!
But I can't see slavers getting us all! Some would remain, scattered here and there.
The remnants would rebuild -- something. And I like to assume what they'd build would be better in some way.
Referring to the series of 20 posts I did last year on Tarot, think about what happens when the physical structures and knowledge (buildings and electronic files) decay.
The IMAGE of all that we have done remains embedded in the astral plane (Akashic Record). Physical action of the people who remain as they rebuild civilization would recreate much of what we've got now -- but it would look different.
There is a theory in esoteric circles that WE have rebuilt Atlantis and are busy self-destructing as they did. (I used that theory in the two novels, MOLT BROTHER and CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS).
I think the driving force that makes such repetitions of past forms (errors and triumphs) happen, or makes us feel or think that such a recreation could happen, is the Soul Mate.
The Alien Romance field has elevated the Soul Mate story to something that can explore vistas of spirituality far beyond what can be reached in a mundane setting.
When two such Souls from different species find each other, their main occupation will be bringing down more Souls to this plane of existence, building family, tribe, nation, civilization -- hybridizing souls. And we all know about hybrid vigor.
For me, THERE -- in the story of the rebuilding of civilizations -- is where the passion, pyrotechnics, and hairy politics prevail. There is where the really profound alien romances happen.
QUESTION: do all species throughout all the galaxies have the cyclical rise and fall of civilizations -- or is that rise and fall a property of human nature?
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://www.simegen.com/jl/
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This week the History Channel aired a two-hour special called LIFE AFTER PEOPLE, which explored how the world would change if the human race vanished.
(snipped)
It's not surprising that wood-frame buildings would succumb quickly to rot, termites, and lightning-set fires. But I was shocked to learn how much less “permanent” steel and concrete are than I'd thought. Moreover, modern concrete is less durable than the type used by the ancient Romans, quite a humbling thought. By a thousand years after our extinction, most of our cities would have become unrecognizable as such.
(snipped)
I'd expected books to hang around for alien archaeologists to read, though. Not so, unless they're fortunate enough to be stored in a desert climate and protected from sunlight. Ironically, the stone and clay tablets of our remote ancestors will last longer than any of our advanced information technology.
----------------
And Rowena Cherry added:
-------------
I also saw the program before it, which was about doomsday predictions from different civilizations all over the globe. Apparently, everyone agrees that the world will end in 2012.
Yesterday, I saw a news item about the ice caps now being thought to melt entirely in the summers in five years' time...which will take us to either the summer of 2011 or of 2012.
-------------
I (Jacqueline Lichtenberg) missed the History Channel LIFE AFTER PEOPLE and prior show. Normally, that kind of show doesn't attract me because the underlying editing thrust is to prod the viewer into believing "the worst" or "the horror of it all" -- or other alarmist agendas disconnected from reality by carefully leaving out salient facts (which I might happen to know -- which implies things I don't know being edited out presenting a false picture).
But both Margaret and Rowena are exactly correct to be monitoring what these shows are purveying. This kind of media slant is indeed where we get our unending flood of "crazy ideas."
And it's relevant because of all the viewers who believe the nonsense. Shows and books like this gave me much of the material used in the Sime~Gen novels -- the portrait of a nearly forgotten Ancient Civilization from before the Sime~Gen mutation pretty much fits the History Channel sketch Margaret has presented here.
However, I have more faith in the human spirit, in love, in loyalty, dreams, and the immortality through children.
If all humans were kidnapped by some galactic slave traders (who neglected to destroy Earth's ecology by stealing water and minerals, too), yes, Nature would reclaim our mighty works rapidly indeed. Escapees from interstellar slavery who returned (provided they could find the planet) wouldn't recognize it from ancestral tales.
Imagine being kidnapped along with most all humans from Earth just to provide genetic material for some huge hybridizing cloning operation!
But I can't see slavers getting us all! Some would remain, scattered here and there.
The remnants would rebuild -- something. And I like to assume what they'd build would be better in some way.
Referring to the series of 20 posts I did last year on Tarot, think about what happens when the physical structures and knowledge (buildings and electronic files) decay.
The IMAGE of all that we have done remains embedded in the astral plane (Akashic Record). Physical action of the people who remain as they rebuild civilization would recreate much of what we've got now -- but it would look different.
There is a theory in esoteric circles that WE have rebuilt Atlantis and are busy self-destructing as they did. (I used that theory in the two novels, MOLT BROTHER and CITY OF A MILLION LEGENDS).
I think the driving force that makes such repetitions of past forms (errors and triumphs) happen, or makes us feel or think that such a recreation could happen, is the Soul Mate.
The Alien Romance field has elevated the Soul Mate story to something that can explore vistas of spirituality far beyond what can be reached in a mundane setting.
When two such Souls from different species find each other, their main occupation will be bringing down more Souls to this plane of existence, building family, tribe, nation, civilization -- hybridizing souls. And we all know about hybrid vigor.
For me, THERE -- in the story of the rebuilding of civilizations -- is where the passion, pyrotechnics, and hairy politics prevail. There is where the really profound alien romances happen.
QUESTION: do all species throughout all the galaxies have the cyclical rise and fall of civilizations -- or is that rise and fall a property of human nature?
Jacqueline Lichtenberg
http://www.simegen.com/jl/
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